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griffonner
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I concentrated,
Intently,
On her every word -
The blink of her eye,
The turn of her head,
And her hand touching
Her glorious hair.
And every sound she made
Floated joyously
Like tiny white feathers
That never landed -
Never attenuated -
Could never be lost.

She was embedded
Forever in my mind:
Never to be forgotten

But there came a moment
When I turned my head -
I know not why -
And I was consumed
By the mounting pyre.
The spectacle of wood
Stacked purposefully,
Rhythmically.
My stomach lurched,
I felt the heat and flame.
She called out my name.

I was someone else
She was irradicable.
She was unchangeable.

Save she had passed through the fire.

 

© griffonner 2020

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Posted : 06/09/2020 11:09 am
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stormwolf
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Well, I confess I had to look up irradicable. (great to expand my vocabulary) 😉 

This poem is mysterious and of course well written...but I have to say what it said to me, which is maybe well left field...
 The poem starts with a man's homage to a beautiful women who was almost ethereal in nature...perfection in his eyes. 

Posted by: @griffonner

Her glorious hair.
And every sound she made
Floated joyously
Like tiny white feathers
That never landed -

A creature of eternity, as eternal as the memory she left in the man's heart.

Then the scene quickly changes. Now there is a darkness and rising panic as a scene comes into consciousness of the funeral pyre. 
The poem may be written from a metaphorical perspective so on different levels. However, to me it speaks of the unbroken connection between two lovers that surpasses death. He is in another life time and so is she. He is given a glimpse of the parting in a previous life "I was someone else" but she called out to him and he realises that she is indeed eternal for she did pass through the fire...and another life but remained unscathed in her essence and spirit so they were only parted momentarily in the whole scheme of things.

It leaves me with a feeling of deep love. Flowers  

Alison x

I never let good advice interfere with my plans.

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Posted : 06/09/2020 7:24 pm
griffonner
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Alison,

I am, quite frankly, dumbfounded. 

I don't write things to deliberately disguise meanings or storylines, it is just the way these things come to me (or come out of me).  I have been criticised for this before now.  To me, of course, it makes absolute sense - how could I write it otherwise: I see it as clearly as if it were happening in front of me, or sometimes 'feel' it in my heart. This is a small fragment of something that has been with me for around twenty years.

I am so glad that you read this.

I am so glad that you understood so precisely that it has made me quite emotional to read your words.

Which means, of course, that I am so glad that you commented.

Blessings and love,

Allen

x

 

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Posted : 06/09/2020 7:53 pm
stormwolf
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I am so glad I 'got it' correctly. Thanks for your comment. 

Alison x 🤗 

I never let good advice interfere with my plans.

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Posted : 07/09/2020 6:01 pm
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