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yutka
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Who are we, I asked myself, one late night,

as we entangled like seaweed

we, who accidentally ascend,

somehow, warm, sinewy, driven

by currents,

 

I wondered

how we could grow into each other without the sun,

only through the contortions of limbs.

 

With clouded eyes and speechless hearts

we explored the still waters

followed the inner stars, got saturated

by the holy water, flooded

with the secret sounds of pain ...

 

As so often, we could not lift out

of the unrecognizable,

as one creature, swim as one body

of muscles and fins,

wrapped in a protective sphere,

that leaves out spills of woe

and our shortening days.

 

Who knows, in the end there might be a language of fish

on other levels, solutions

to everything unspeakable,

spoken for us ...

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Posted : 25/08/2020 6:44 pm
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franciman
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Noble Member

Hi there, and welcome back.

This is an intriguing piece.  One that I'm not sure I understand, though I'm more than happy with my 'understanding' of it.  I loved the final stanza.  It's a bit like turning the philosopher's stone in your hand and admiring all its Surfaces...  Very lyrical also.

Cheers,

Jim x

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Posted : 26/08/2020 2:52 pm
stormwolf
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Wow! I really liked this. It is mysterious and erotic too. It speaks to me of the communication of lovemaking each one carrying their own issues looking for total connection. To become one permanently...

As so often, we could not lift out
of the unrecognizable,
as one creature, swim as one body
of muscles and fins,
wrapped in a protective sphere,
that leaves out spills of woe
and our shortening days.

It is profound in its questioning and desire to understand the levels beyond thought.

I once read a poem that spoke to me about this. It said 'the supreme sadness of lovers...is to be two.' In other words, there can be such a deep yearning to become united, to lose or surrender your being, that the knowledge of always being two separate people causes them anguish.

I hope I have read it well but even if I did not, poetry is open to be interpreted in any way it comes over I think.

Nice to see you posting again! 🤩 

 

I never let good advice interfere with my plans.

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Posted : 27/08/2020 12:08 pm
yutka
(@yutka)
Active Member

@stormwolf, well well well, I am amazed by your sensitivity, I could not have said it better in prose, what you describe is exactly what my poem is about... We yearn to flow into each other, but sadly, this cannot happen (except via conception)

As we all are united, all living things,  we can just long for our origin, where we came from and I guess, will be going back in the end, to learn a "new language"..

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Posted : 28/08/2020 3:32 pm
featheredwing
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Trusted Member

I think stormwolf has said it all with her comment. I can only say how much I liked your poem for it's honesty on the question of love and how it can affect us when we experience it so deeply.

Jenny Featheredwing.

J E Skinner

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Posted : 29/08/2020 1:00 pm
stormwolf
(@stormwolf)
Member Moderator

@yutka It always gives me a deep joy if I manage to decipher a poem correctly. Your poem was very deep and meaningful.

Alison x

I never let good advice interfere with my plans.

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Posted : 07/09/2020 6:11 pm
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